Startled

i was excited about the tags but well mc has a very questionable character design  it is a bit inconsistentThe story is not that bad a bit average probably not an experienced writer  but keep going  ;) It is a bit fast pieced so it comes out as some things are missing

i think plot is good .but story progression is too artificial and forced   ,i get that you want character to be mysterious but every character felt too cringed. you should improve your writing quality . it seems like you want to write in detail but forced to shorten them which make it bad .

Author here, its my first time writing a game novel. So i hope you let me know how you find it and if any improvements can be made. The novel will be focused on the Aramageddon and on reality. It won’ be fixed only on the game, reality will also have crucial and significant impact on the Mc’s life. The novel will also have romance, and some sort of slice of life into it. The mc is just 14 years old whilst his sister is 15, so don’t expect him to do everything perfectly although he isnt dumb and will mostly pick the right decision. The mc is op, but the pacing will be slow to medium, do let me know if you like it or hate it. Ask any questions here, and thank you for reading this far.

I like a twisted combination of cyberpunk dystopia x martial art and qi power. character development and pacing is well done I like Asic and Ivy chemistry, they are so cute together and hehe maybe steamy too. hope to see more update!

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I really like the story so far. I am at chapter 40. Please update soon, author!

"Tauri, you don't belong out here, go back before it's too late," he warns me, looking back to the palace. Stubbornly I shake my head and cling to his hand, afraid to let go.

The ice we skate is getting pretty thin